The Legend of Slottsfjellet: Chapter Six (Part 18)

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Somehow Joe managed to not see Marta at all until early Wednesday afternoon, about an hour before the workers were to arrive. He was standing outside trying to picture the completed castle in its place when she came up behind him. He heard her approaching.

“It’s going to be really busy the next few days,” he said, without turning.

She stood next to him and looked in the direction he was facing. “Yes. Yes, it will be.” When Joe didn’t add anything else, she observed, “We won’t see each other much while the castle is being built.”

Joe looked at her but still didn’t turn. Instead of responding, he put his arm around her shoulders.

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One comment on “The Legend of Slottsfjellet: Chapter Six (Part 18)

  1. Would it work better to say “until early the next afternoon”? Also, could it help to have a description of *why* he knew it was her approaching (a particular sound, or her perfume, or something)?

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