The Legend of Slottsfjellet: Chapter Four (Part 13)

Just starting? Be sure to check out The Legend of Slottsfjellet: Foreword and Disclaimer first, so you know what’s going on.

Joe was over halfway finished with the plans by evening—well ahead of the deadline Karl had set. He was pleased at his progress. Joe’s enjoyment of architecture almost made him forget how far he was from home.

Joe was able to work undistracted until Marta opened the door around six-thirty. She carried two plates, each with a large sandwich. “Hello, I am Marta, and I will be your waitress today,” she joked.

Joe was glad to see her, and not just because she was bringing food. “Thanks,” he smiled, as she handed him one of the sandwiches.

“It is my pleasure. I also have my meal; do you mind if I join you?”

“Of course not,” said Joe, “if you don’t mind sitting on the floor with me. I don’t want to get food on these papers.”

“Yes, I see. How are they coming along? The papers, I mean to say. May I look at them?” She set the plates on the floor, then came over behind him and rested her hands on his shoulders as he showed her the drawings. Marta seemed interested, so Joe began to explain the different details in the plans. As he talked, she began massaging his shoulders.

Joe let out a groan. “Ohhh. . . that feels good.”

“You certainly are tense, Mr. Stadtler,” observed Marta as she worked his muscles. “Relax.” Marta’s hands were strong, and Joe couldn’t help but do exactly what she said.

7 comments on “The Legend of Slottsfjellet: Chapter Four (Part 13)

  1. Is “deadling” short for dead linguist?

    I was expecting to read something more about the door being left unlocked (mentioned in part 12): either he goes out and explores, tries to run away, pokes his head out and gets scolded, or at least thinks/comments that the security restrictions are relaxing. I realize that you come back to this in part 14, but it just seemed that there should be some explicit indication of his plans to do something when he first notices the unlocked door.

    For example, if he poked his head out quickly, and someone saw him, that would give a reason for Marta (or someone else) to re-lock the door, as you mentioned in part 14.

    It’s coming along nicely, Mr. Author!

    • I am having several retyping problems like this. I don’t think it’s a real word, but I mistyped it and didn’t get a red-squiggly letting me know I made a mistake. Where’s the red-squiggly when you need it?

    • Also, your points about giving some justification for him not doing more exploring, and the door being locked later are valid. However, if you’re going to post spoilers for upcoming segments, you should at least preface them with “spoiler alert,” or post the comments *after* the section they would spoil. 🙂

  2. Oops. I’ll be more careful with sspoilerss next time.

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