The Legend of Slottsfjellet: Chapter Three (Part 8)

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Joe wanted rest badly, but he was also curious about the drawings. As it always did, his curiosity took precedence over sleep, so Joe sat down at the table and began leafing through the sheets of vellum.

There were a few things that struck him as he went over the sketches. The first was the quality of them: Joe wasn’t sure that they could be called “sketches” at all. They were very precise, very detailed, and in many ways had the look of final plans. The second was the materials list: this castle was to be built in two weeks, yet it was exclusively made of stone, glass, and wood. There was no steel or concrete in it anywhere, not even in the framework or as reinforcement. The third and strangest thing he noticed about it—and Joe laughed when he saw it—was its size. Though the project included a complete and rather large foundation for a castle, the structure itself was not a castle at all, but rather a small tower in the corner of the plot.

Naturally, this raised even more questions, but it seemed obvious that Joe was not likely to have them answered any time soon. After another twenty minutes at the desk, Joe opened the small cot and tried to sleep.

6 comments on “The Legend of Slottsfjellet: Chapter Three (Part 8)

  1. Rossio says:

    Why did Joe want to rest badly?

    • Good question. Having flown to that part of the world before, I kind of figured that he would be pretty tired & jet-lagged by this point. However, I forgot that he spent a lot of the flight sleeping. I will have to think about this.

      • Rossio says:

        Maybe, if you want to say that he was tired, it might be better to say he needed rest badly. Although it still doesn’t sound like he should really be that tired.

  2. Rossio says:

    Wouldn’t it sound better to say “their quality” than “the quality of them?”

    • Maybe… but this is how I would talk if I were telling the story out loud, too. I’ll consider it.

      (By the way, that’s always my litmus test for how awkward something sounds: “Would I say it like this if I were telling the story out loud to a small group of friends?”)

      • Rossio says:

        If I were in the room listening to you tell a story which included the words “the quality of them” I think I would think it sounded awkward.

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